Sting and the Police- Every Breath you take
Every breath you take, every move you make
Every bond you break, every step you take
I'll be watching you
Every single day, every word you say
Every game you play, every night you stay
I'll be watching you
O can't you see
You belong to me?
How my poor heart aches
With every step you take!
Every bond you break, every step you take
I'll be watching you
Every single day, every word you say
Every game you play, every night you stay
I'll be watching you
O can't you see
You belong to me?
How my poor heart aches
With every step you take!
Her skin roasted
Apricot almond
Vibrating light photons
Enchanting pupils
Her glow rivaling
CBS camera’s framing
Media gods
Staring, I scrolled
Clocking every look
A moment thrust
On sinners, snake eyes
hot hands on dice
Rolling naives resisting
My likes, status update
Neva. In a relationship
Her face rotates
In my head, in my feed
Minutes between madison square garden
Halftime shows, stealing peaks
This suffers from the "interiorization" that we talk about. All the fragmentary imagery never coalesces into a clear setting. Try elongating the lines, and force yourself now to turn this into mostly standard English grammar. Yes, we can break rules in poetry. We just don't want to rely on that for everything, though.
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