Show Don’t Tell
Tell:Maddie’s boyfriend left her and broke her heart
Show:
Maddie sat on the edge of her bed, soaking up and blowing her nose into shirt she bought him at their first Dead concert.
Tell: The girl was bored
Show:
Lisa paced the length of her room, dragging her feet like soldiers in the mud, stopping only to fix and re-fix the bolted family picture by her door.
Tell: The boy is afraid of dogs
Show:
Marcus touched his scar as the band marched past the police convoy standing firm like a mother over her newborn. His pace quickened realizing that the officers were not alone, they had brought “mans” best friend, but Marcus only knew his best friends to be his running mates from school.
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